wow. I almost missed it! So, here’s the deal, straight from the Queen B herself:
Write a short story/flash fiction story in 200 words or less, excluding the title. It can be in any format, including a poem. Begin the story with the words, “The door swung open” These four words will be included in the word count.
If you want to give yourself an added challenge (optional), use the same beginning words and end with the words: “the door swung shut.” (also included in the word count)
For those who want an even greater challenge, make your story 200 words EXACTLY!
Because I’m a show off, lol, I did everything above, included the exact word count. What do you think?
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The door swung open, and there he was, drenched in blood. “Lucas!” I ran to his limping form, slipping my arm around his waist before he fell. “What happened?”
He winced and took two steps forward. “I killed one of them, boy those beasts are fast.”
This wasn’t happening. It was all a sick, twisted dream. “Lucas…are you going to be alright?” I choked on the words, hoping he would say yes.
“I’ll be fine, sunshine,” he said in that hushed, dark voice that gave me chills.
Screams from somewhere in the mansion permeated through the hidden room. I clung to Lucas tighter, pretending I didn’t hear a thing.
“I have to go back.”
“What? You can’t, Lucas, we’ll find another way!”
He leaned into my curls, his lips brushing my hair. “I came back to give you this.” He handed me the keys to the Jag.
I shook my head. “No.”
He kissed my face and wiped away a tear. “I won’t let them hurt you. I couldn’t live with myself if you died.” Then, before I could beg him to stay, he shuffled to the door.
“Lucas!”
“I love you Meg.” He winked, and the door swung shut.
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Love!
I thought it was going to be a long time ago so the jag threw me, but nicely done. Mine is #72
Ooh, intense.
Have a great weekend.
Nice. I liked it. I hope poor Lucas gets better soon.
He came back to give her the keys to his Jag.
That's love, baby.
Great! I was hooked by the first line 🙂
— Nick, #383: http://bit.ly/p1sCwZ
Loved the fact she got the Jag! Genius 🙂
Awww…I really enjoyed this story. Excellent job hooking me from the beginning with that poor fella and his blood-covered self.
Poor guy! Feel sorry for the girl, she's going to miss him when he's dead.
I too thought it was in a different time until the jag. I loved that! Great job. I'm #232
Well done! I don't even know the guy and I don't want him to go back out there.
Mine is #291: http://thewarriormuse.blogspot.com/2011/09/first-campaign-challenge-flash-fiction.html
Wow! Nice!
Now I want to know what these beasts are. Masterful, the way you hooked me and kept me going to the end.
Great job, Eliza! 🙂
(and your blog rocks!)
thanks everyone!